--- a/docs/evolve-collaboration.rst	Tue Mar 27 19:42:09 2012 +0200
+++ b/docs/evolve-collaboration.rst	Tue Mar 27 19:46:54 2012 +0200
@@ -7,7 +7,7 @@
 After having written some code for ticket #42, M W. start a patch (this
 will be kind of like a 'work-in-progress' checkpoint initially)::
 
-    $ ci -m '[entities] remove magic'
+    $ hg ci -m '[entities] remove magic'
 
 Instant patch ! Note how the default phase of this changeset is (still)
 in "draft" state.
@@ -27,7 +27,7 @@
 "publishing" since they do not have the notion of non-public changesets
 (or mutable history).
 
-In the transition ... phase from older mercurial servers, this will
+During the transition from older mercurial servers to new ones, this will
 happen often, so be careful.
 
 Now let's come back to our patch. Next hour sees good progress and W.
@@ -44,7 +44,7 @@
 
     $ hg push # was done with a modern mercurial, draft phase is preserved
 
-The next day, Mr C.W, which arrives very very early, can immediately
+The next day, Mr C.W., who arrives very early, can immediately
 work out some glitches in the patch.
 
 He then starts another one, for ticket #43 and finally commits it.